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My most passionate thing is about my major. Beacause i found my dream not easy. When i found my dream, i already entered other major. So i have to change my school and major. It took a long time so that i feel like i¡¯m late. So i think that some reasons made me more passionate.

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Hello, Alexis! Challenge yourself to do better each time and to improve yourself with each step. Your goals will be met if you put out your best effort. You did wonderful day! Keep it up. I am always here for you. Fighting!

My most passionate thing is about my major.
>>> CORRECT.

Beacause i found my dream not easy. When i found my dream, i already entered other major.
>>> Because I found my dream not easy. When I found my dream, I had already entered another major.

So i have to change my school and major. 
>>> So I have to change my school and major.

It took a long time so that i feel like i¡¯m late.
>>> It took a long time, so I feel like I¡¯m late.

So i think that some reasons made me more passionate.
>>> So I think that some things made me more passionate.


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