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My dream house

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When I become older and earn enough money to buy the house, I want to live in front of the sea. This is my dream house since I was young,because I wanted to live near the beach so I can swim and do surfing whenever I want. I like swimming and playing in the water so it would be the best place for me. Also, it has to be three story building so I can make lots of playing zone in the house. On the first floor, I want to put a huge TV and a large couch, that I can fell asleep while I¡¯m watching TV. On the second floor, I want to make Karaoke zone with lots of sort of drinks I like. When I get tired on my life because of studying I usually go to Karaoke to relieve my stress with my friends. So I want it in my house when I get my own house. Lastly on the third floor, I want to place lots of games such as nintendo switch, nintendo Wii. This is because I like playing games with my family and friends, so I want to play it when someone visit my home. I hope I will get my dream house someda

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Hi, Emily! Thank you so much for answering your homework :)
I really appreciate it! Keep it up :)
See you in class ~ ^^ 


-Teacher Nikki :) 

When I become older and earn enough money to buy the house, I want to live in front of the sea. 
>> When I become older and earn enough money to buy a house, I want to live in front of the sea. 
This is my dream house since I was young,because I wanted to live near the beach so I can swim and do surfing whenever I want.
>> This is my dream house since I was young because I wanted to live near the beach so I can swim and do surfing whenever I want.
I like swimming and playing in the water so it would be the best place for me. Also, it has to be three story building so I can make lots of playing zone in the house.
>> I like swimming and playing in the water so it would be the best place for me. Also, it has to be three-story building so I can make lots of playing zone in the house.
On the first floor, I want to put a huge TV and a large couch, that I can fell asleep while I¡¯m watching TV.
>> On the first floor, I want to put a huge TV and a large couch, so that I can fall asleep while I¡¯m watching TV.
On the second floor, I want to make Karaoke zone with lots of sort of drinks I like. When I get tired on my life because of studying I usually go to Karaoke to relieve my stress with my friends. 
>> On the second floor, I want to make a Karaoke zone with lots of drinks that I like. When I get tired of my life because of studying, I usually go to Karaoke to relieve my stress with my friends. 
So I want it in my house when I get my own house. Lastly on the third floor, I want to place lots of games such as nintendo switch, nintendo Wii. This is because I like playing games with my family and friends, so I want to play it when someone visit my home. I hope I will get my dream house someda
>> So I want it in my own house someday. Lastly, on the third floor, I want to place lots of games such as Nintendo Switch and Nintendo Wii. This is because I like playing games with my family and friends and I want to play games when someone visits my home. I hope I will get my dream house someday.
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