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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of camping alone?

These days, more people travel alone, because the single-person households has increased.
So, a few years ago, single camping was trend.
Anyway, let me introduce of single camping's pros and cons.
First, single camping or travel is to able to grow the independence
It is have to set up a tent, build a fire, cook and solve it own self.
Second, is nobody disturb me.
Sometimes when we go to the travel with friends or family, their make me upset.
But, alone travel is only my travel, so nobody disturb me.
However, everything have a disadvantage.
I think, cons of camping alone is lonely.
Everything prepare of travel is myself and then after the camping, I have to clean up also do only myself.
It's I feel so lazy.
So, I'm not ready camping alone, because I don't have a confidence of single travel.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of camping alone?


These days, more people travel alone, because the single-person households has increased.
>> These days, more people travel alone, because the single-person households have  increased.
So, a few years ago, single camping was trend.
>> So, a few years ago, single camping was a trend.
OR >> So, a few years ago, single camping used to be a trend.
Anyway, let me introduce of single camping's pros and cons.
>> Anyway, let me introduce single camping's pros and cons.
First, single camping or travel is to able to grow the independence
>> First, single camping or traveling makes you grow independently.
It is have to set up a tent, build a fire, cook and solve it own self.
>> You have to set up a tent, build a fire, cook, and solve things on your own.
Second, is nobody disturb me.
>> Secondly, no one's going to disturb you.
Sometimes when we go to the travel with friends or family, their make me upset.
>> Sometimes when we go traveling with friends or family, they make me upset.
But, alone travel is only my travel, so nobody disturb me.
>> But, traveling is only my trip, so nobody will disturb me.
However, everything have a disadvantage.
>> However, everything has a disadvantage.
I think, cons of camping alone is lonely.
>> I think, one of the cons of camping alone is loneliness.
Everything prepare of travel is myself and then after the camping, I have to clean up also do only myself.
>> When traveling, I have to prepare everything, and after that, I have to clean up all by myself.
It's I feel so lazy.
>>  It makes me feel so lazy.
So, I'm not ready camping alone, because I don't have a confidence of single travel.
>> So, I'm not ready to go camping alone, because I don't have the confidence to travel by myself.

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