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Is keeping your ex-partner’s contact information and videos/photos, a form of cheating in a relation

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2023-06-29 3648

회원님의 영작문

I believe that cheating in a relationship entails any form of action making the partner uncomfortable. I think differently about keeping the ex-partner’s contact information. Indeed, it is not right to keep the videos and photos of ex-partners. This is because it is a matter of trust. In most cases, keeping the memory of past relationships is not intentional. Speaking of the person who keeps every record and feels annoyed to delete it. Some can blame forgetfulness as part of keeping all those videos and photos. However, all kinds of relationships require effort to be long-term and trustworthy. In my opinion, close relations such as family and couples require more endeavor because inevitably those relationships should be long-term. Accordingly, videos and photos must be deleted from the phone after the end of a relationship. On the other hand, I have a different opinion regarding contact. believe deleting the contact information intentionally requires more thought.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Aciel. In my perspective, I think people who still keep photos and videos of their ex-partners despite being in a new relationship means that person had yet to move on. A part of them has not completely moved on from their previous relationship. Maybe they are still hoping to reunite with them, which could be unfair to the current partner. Moving on and starting fresh means you would disconnect yourself from everything related to your past relationship. Memories, whether bad or good, can stay in your mind or thoughts but not in your phone. If the person in not yet in a new relationship, then it's okay to keep those memorabilia. 
 
I believe that cheating in a relationship entails any form of action making the partner uncomfortable. 
>>>  correct
I think differently about keeping the ex-partner’s contact information. 
>>> correct 
Indeed, it is not right to keep the videos and photos of ex-partners. 
>>> correct  
This is because it is a matter of trust.
>>> correct 
In most cases, keeping the memory of past relationships is not intentional. 
>>> correct  
Speaking of the person who keeps every record and feels annoyed to delete it. Some can blame forgetfulness as part of keeping all those videos and photos. 
>>> OR: Speaking of the person who keeps every record and feels annoyed to delete them, some can blame forgetfulness as the reason for keeping all those videos and photos.  
However, all kinds of relationships require effort to be long-term and trustworthy. 
>>>  correct  
In my opinion, close relations such as family and couples require more endeavor because inevitably those relationships should be long-term. 
>>> correct   
Accordingly, videos and photos must be deleted from the phone after the end of a relationship. 
>>>  correct  
On the other hand, I have a different opinion regarding contact. 
>>> correct   
I believe deleting the contact information intentionally requires more thought.
>>>  correct  
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