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Do you agree that religious leaders should maintain celibacy? Why or why not?

작성자: 문*현
2023-06-28 2022

회원님의 영작문

Original Christians believed that in the new world, all would be like angels, so there would be no marriage. I believe the purpose of celibacy for most religions is to ensure the leaders follow the example of God and examples to followers. However, I believe no married life would exemplify perfect life. If religious leaders can marry and have a family, they can provide more diversified advice to followers. I have never sought religious advice before but when I see it in the movie, it always gives advice based on the Bible which can be unrealistic for modern life. Religious leaders only can give advice because it is all they see and hear. However, the interpretation of religious sayings can be varied from person to person so it cannot be straightforwardly accepted. If priests can have a family and engage deeper in normal life, I believe they can provide realistic advice. They should not have disorderly life but the religious leader should not be obligated to maintain celibacy.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Aciel. Point well taken. In the Catholic religion, celibacy for priests is a must. I think it's because they have to devote their entire being and life to serving God and the followers alone. And you're right, they also have to follow God's example. That is the reason they refer to it as a "calling", because not all humans can live their whole life following the footsteps of God/Jesus.

Original Christians believed that in the new world, all would be like angels, so there would be no marriage. 
>>> correct  
I believe the purpose of celibacy for most religions is to ensure the leaders follow the example of God and examples to followers. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: I believe the purpose of celibacy for most religions is to ensure the leaders follow the example of God and be an example to followers. 
However, I believe no married life would exemplify perfect life. 
>>> However, I believe a no-marriage life would exemplify a perfect life. 
If religious leaders can marry and have a family, they can provide more diversified advice to followers. 
>>> correct
I have never sought religious advice before but when I see it in the movie, it always gives advice based on the Bible which can be unrealistic for modern life. 
>>> correct
Religious leaders only can give advice because it is all they see and hear. 
>>> correct
However, the interpretation of religious sayings can be varied from person to person so it cannot be straightforwardly accepted. 
>>> correct
If priests can have a family and engage deeper in normal life, I believe they can provide realistic advice.
>>> correct
They should not have disorderly life but the religious leader should not be obligated to maintain celibacy.
>>> They should not have a disorderly life but the religious leader should not be obligated to maintain celibacy.
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