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I think that we try to reduce the amount of consuming energy than developing new energy.

New technology seems to show humans endless desire and materal convience.

From the point of view of other animals and nature, the existence of human might be not good companions.

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Ms. Lily!
Yp nailed it! That is my point too.  Also, if people really wanted to live in an eco-friendly environment, we need not create more facilities for human convenience but et humans adjust.  Greed makes the heart unsatisfied.
See you later.
Aki~

I think that we try to reduce the amount of consuming energy than developing new energy.
>>> CORRECT!

New technology seems to show humans endless desire and material convenience.
>>> CORRECT!

From the point of view of other animals and nature, the existence of humans might be not good companions
>>> CORRECT!
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