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Hi, there.
It's pouring, cats and dogs.
So what?
Of course, there was only a few patients/clients at the clinic, nevertheless, the profit for today is doing good.
Anyway, my singapore trip is coming, it only remained 1 week.
Hence, I have to correct the itinerary as soon as possible.
There are some attractions and restaurants to be needed a reservation, so I should determine it quickly.
If there is no big deal, I am going to check the itinerary with Irene tonight.
(After a while...)
Now, I am back to my composition.
There is the best news ever.
The tax accounting company have done calculating the general income tax last year today, and I found that it is lower than expected.
It made us extremely happy.
I would like to drink today, of course, not too much.
As for my assignment, many doctors like to drink or play golf in their leisure time.
Dr. MJ prefer to read books and learn something than play, while I like to meet my friends in the leisure time.
Happy day!
See you tomorrow.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

I can see here in your composition today that you wrote it in two parts. Apparently, the weather definitely affects the revenue of your clinic. Well, to look at the weather on a brighter (or darker) side, there are some diseases that this season may bring. Then, there maybe more patients than clients in that case.

All of you three are all set for your trip to Singapore. Of course, it will be hot and humid there as well, but then no one can stop you from enjoying your time with your mom and Irene. May your itinerary and planned activities go as planned without any hassle.

Saving some of your earnings this year to pay taxes can make next year a little lighter. Anyway, as unique individuals, leisure time is spent in a million ways by doctors. Depending o your personalities, you can be active or introverted.

Some capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and correct series of words (syntax) are my suggestions. Please read them well and analyze the patterns. Great job!

See you in class soon.

-T. Donna~

Hi, there.
>> Correct!

It's pouring, cats and dogs.
>> Correct!

So what?
>> Correct!

Of course, there was only a few patients/clients at the clinic, nevertheless, the profit for today is doing good.
>> Correct!

Anyway, my singapore trip is coming, it only remained 1 week.
>> Anyway, my Singapore trip is coming soon there is one more week remaining.

Hence, I have to correct the itinerary as soon as possible.
>> Correct!

There are some attractions and restaurants to be needed a reservation, so I should determine it quickly.
>> There are some attractions and restaurants that need reservations, so I should determine it quickly.

If there is no big deal, I am going to check the itinerary with Irene tonight.
>> Correct!

(After a while...)
>> Correct!

Now, I am back to my composition.
>> Correct!

There is the best news ever.
>> Correct!

The tax accounting company have done calculating the general income tax last year today, and I found that it is lower than expected.
>> Today, the tax accounting company is done calculating the general income tax last year, and I found out that it is lower than expected.

It made us extremely happy.
>> Correct!

I would like to drink today, of course, not too much.
>> Correct!

As for my assignment, many doctors like to drink or play golf in their leisure time.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ prefer to read books and learn something than play, while I like to meet my friends in the leisure time.
>> Dr. MJ prefers to read books and learn something than play, while I like to meet my friends during my leisure time.

Happy day!
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!

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