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Should cell phones be allowed at school? Why or why not?

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Yes. It's because if we should use the cell phone when we have to research or find some information. This way is comfortable to do it. It's because one of my school's rules is submitting our cell phone. And when we find something, we should use the cell phone. It is uncomfortable. So I think we should cell phone allow in the school.

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Good evening Daisy. ^_^
It's Monday again. Thank you for diligently answering this essay question. 
I admire your diligence despite your very busy schedule. 
I agree that cellphones should be allowed in schools. However, it should not be allowed when there are tests or quizzes because it can be used as a tool for cheating. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. See you in class later. :)
~Teacher Charry

Yes. 
>> Yes, they should. 
It's because if we should use the cell phone when we have to research or find some information. 
>> It's because  we can use the cell phone when we have to research or find some information. 
This way is comfortable to do it. 
>> This way, it is comfortable to do it. 
It's because one of my school's rules is submitting our cell phone. 
>> CORRECT!
And when we find something, we should use the cell phone. 
>> But when we need to find something, we should use the cell phone. 
It is uncomfortable. 
>> CORRECT!
So I think we should cell phone allow in the school.
>> So I think, the use of cell phone in school should be allowed. 
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