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The goal that I achieved in recent years was joining the company. After I graduated, I submitted many resume to many companies. and I failed. So when I got the email that I was accepted, I was so pleased with my parents.

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Hello!


Thank you for accomplishing your homework! Writing some sentences in English also contribute to your constant practice. Stay positive, work hard, and success will be knocking on your door. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. See you in class!



Regards,

Teacher Lexie


The goal that I achieved in recent years was joining the company. 

>> The goal that I have achieved in recent years is joining a company. 

After I graduated, I submitted many resume to many companies and I failed. 

>> After I graduated, I submitted my resume to many companies and failed. 

So when I got the email that I was accepted, I was so pleased with my parents.
>> So when I got the email that I was accepted, my parents and I were so pleased.

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