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If you meet some South Koreans there in your place, what kind of information will you ask them?

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Well, first of all, I'd like to ask some useful shopping centers such as clothes and shoes, grocery not just big shopping malls like COSTCO and Walmart. Because, those are quite busy and there are too many products packed which are too heavy.
Besides, I wonder if there are Korean communities. I want to meet people to make a friend.
Lastly, I want to choose a good presbyterian church so that I can relax and recharge my batteries through worship and relationship with the people.

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Hi there, Jane!

Wow, you never forgot to write and your sentences are even longer and better! I am so happy to read from you here on the composition site once again!

Trying to find new friends can take place in some of your favorite places, like a coffee shop or a restaurant. Also, you can be in the loop of the local events such as market day on weekends. Attend them and introduce yourself. You can also try using an application on your phone. Seek out people with similar interests and don¡¯t be afraid to make the first move.

As you can see, some grammar suggestions contain efficient ways of using conjunctions as well as correct capitalization. Thank you for sending this excellent answer! I shall rea from you again next time.

Happy weekend!

-T. Donna~

Well, first of all, I'd like to ask some useful shopping centers such as clothes and shoes, grocery not just big shopping malls like COSTCO and Walmart. 
>> Correct!
Or: Well, first of all, I'd like to ask some useful shopping centers such as clothes, shoes, and groceries not just big shopping malls like COSTCO and Walmart. 

Because, those are quite busy and there are too many products packed which are too heavy.
>> Correct!

Besides, I wonder if there are Korean communities. 
>> Correct!

I want to meet people to make a friend.
>> Correct!

Lastly, I want to choose a good presbyterian church so that I can relax and recharge my batteries through worship and relationship with the people.
>> Correct!
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