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2023-06-22 2066

회원님의 영작문

Hi, T.Donna.
How is your computer now?
Before I moved to our new building, there were many problems about computer and internet at the clinic.
Hence, we determined that we changed our computer and internet to new ones.
And now, we are very satisfied with that.
Computer is not a permenant device, so that we should replace it to new one at least every five years, I think.
I prefer a desktop to a laptop, because we can upgrade each component in a desktop.
Anyway, there was nothing special at the clnic.
Unfortunately, the profit for today was not good.
However, there was a good thing, which we succeeded to start new treatment today.
We can treat many patients with it, and consequently we can get more money.
About my assignment, the leisure time for our age is very important.
At our age, we basically have a depressed mood, because we feel our weakness of physic and limitation of our possibility.
But, we should work for ourselves and families continuously.
So, resting is crucial.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Dr. Kim!

My computer will get by the assistance of our technician. So far, without our technician, I will never know what to do. I am so grateful for his kindness and helpfulness. Accordingly, the expected average desktop PC to last between three and eight years. Desktops tend to kick on longer than laptops due to the extra space inside the box. Maybe my computer is older than I expected. Nevertheless,  am grateful for the time we spent together with my computer. 

As you have detailed in class today, the new treatment which seems fun to operate can bring you higher profit. This is very good to know. Innovation is often necessary for companies to adapt and overcome the challenges of change. It fosters growth. Your patients and clients alike will always look forward to something new available in your clinic.

I totally agree that rest is an essential component of working well and working smart. Leisure time is crucial to our physical, mental, and emotional health.

As you can see below, you have made a lot of correct sentences. Hence, study the suggestions made in the other sentences to even level up your writing skill set. Great job!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

How is your computer now?
>> Correct!

Before I moved to our new building, there were many problems about computer and internet at the clinic.
>> Correct!

Hence, we determined that we changed our computer and internet to new ones.
>> Hence, we determined that we should changed our computer and Internet to new ones.

And now, we are very satisfied with that.
>> Correct!

Computer is not a permenant device, so that we should replace it to new one at least every five years, I think.
>> Correct!

I prefer a desktop to a laptop, because we can upgrade each component in a desktop.
>> Correct!

Anyway, there was nothing special at the clnic.
>> Correct!
Or: clinic

Unfortunately, the profit for today was not good.
>> Correct!

However, there was a good thing, which we succeeded to start new treatment today.
>> However, there was a good thing, in which we succeeded to start a new treatment today.

We can treat many patients with it, and consequently we can get more money.
>> Correct!

About my assignment, the leisure time for our age is very important.
>> Correct!
Or: About my assignment, leisure time for our age is very important.

At our age, we basically have a depressed mood, because we feel our weakness of physic and limitation of our possibility.
>> Correct!
Or: At our age, we basically have a depressed mood, because we feel our weakness of physical and the limitations of other possibilities.

But, we should work for ourselves and families continuously.
>> Correct!

So, resting is crucial.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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