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In my opinion, The people have to be skilled that was designed building something.
Because the first step is designing that.
Good design catch people's eyes.
And this give attractive impression to people.
Second step is tool's skill.
The people that want to make something need to have skilled that is tool's skill.
Finally If you have these, you can make something that you want it.

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Hi Sae Bom!

Thanks for sharing your insights reagrding to this topic. I really appreciate your hard work. Keep it up!

- Kristine ^^ 

In my opinion, The people have to be skilled that was designed building something.
>> In my opinion, they should be skilled at designing something. 
Because the first step is designing that.
>> Since the first thing to do is designing.
Good design catch people's eyes.
>> Good design attracts attention and interest.
And this give attractive impression to people.
>> People perceive this as appealing.
Second step is tool's skill.
>> The second factor is the tools they utilize.
The people that want to make something need to have skilled that is tool's skill.
>> People who desire to create something must have good tools.
Finally If you have these, you can make something that you want it.
>> Finally you can make anything you wait if you have these skills.
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