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What do you think the Korean government should do with regards to the increasing rates of suicide in

작성자: 이*아
2023-06-19 1108

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The Korean suicide rate has been hugely increasing, especially the suicide of celebrities and people who have a job that has to show their face and life to others. However, these pitful situations have not been able to control by one's will. In other words, it will be better when others' supports start. According to the National Life Group, "Communication can solve, or cause problems. It is the way we represent ourselves, make requests, share how we feel about the world and others" (Beverly, 2018). This is the point that the Korean government should know. How power and important communication is. As claimed by today's newspaper, almost all celebrities' suicide reasons are because of our words. Words change the life of a person whether it's a good way or bad way. Compliments make one's hope and dream; however, bullying, swears, and negative words lead to one's death. For those reasons, I think the Korean government should teach how to communicate, and respect others.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Well-said, Su A! Your essay was able to summarize your main points without feeling like there could be more to add. Everything was straight to the point.  The increasing rates of deaths by suicide is indeed an important issue that the government should also pay attention to. Let's hope we eventually see improvement from their side. 
~T.Harmony <3

The Korean suicide rate has been hugely increasing, especially the suicide of celebrities and people who have a job that has to show their face and life to others.  
>> CORRECT!
However, these pitful situations have not been able to control by one's will. 
>> However, these pitiful situations have not been able to be controlled by one's will.
In other words, it will be better when others' supports start. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> ..., it will be better if others will offer their support.
According to the National Life Group, "Communication can solve, or cause problems. It is the way we represent ourselves, make requests, share how we feel about the world and others" (Beverly, 2018). 
>> CORRECT!
This is the point that the Korean government should know. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> ...that the Korean government should be aware of.
How power and important communication is. 
>> How powerful and important communication is.
As claimed by today's newspaper, almost all celebrities' suicide reasons are because of our words. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> As reported by today's newspaper,...
Words change the life of a person whether it's a good way or bad way.
>> CORRECT!
 Compliments make one's hope and dream; however, bullying, swears, and negative words lead to one's death. 
>> CORRECT! (This is a very good statement!)
For those reasons, I think the Korean government should teach how to communicate, and respect others.
>> ...the Korean government should teach the general public how to communicate better and to respect other people.
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