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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think people love eating spicy food?

I think, Korea is one of the countries that likes spicy food.
From an early age we're ate spicy food often, so we are become insensibility of spicy taste.
Anyway, the reason why some people love the spicy food.
It's said that spicy food is reduce stress.
But, If I ate spicy taste, rather the stacked stressed.
The next is spicy food conceit.
Some people show pride about spicy taste to someone.
But, most of these people can't eat well spicy food.
I don't prefer spicy food.
If I ate spicy food, start the sweat like a waterfall and then later I have to live in bathroom.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think people love eating spicy food?


I think, Korea is one of the countries that likes spicy food.
>> CORRECT!
From an early age we're ate spicy food often, so we are become insensibility of spicy taste.
>> At an early age we often eat spicy food, so we become insensitive to the spicy taste.
Anyway, the reason why some people love the spicy food.
It's said that spicy food is reduce stress.
>> Anyway, the reason why some people love eating spicy food is because it is said that spicy food reduces stress.
But, If I ate spicy taste, rather the stacked stressed.
>> But, if I eat spicy taste, I feel stacked rather than stressed.
The next is spicy food conceit.
>> The next reason is that people become conceited when they eat spicy food.
Some people show pride about spicy taste to someone.
>> Some people show pride about being able to handle the spicy taste to someone.
But, most of these people can't eat well spicy food.
>> But, most of these people can't eat spicy food well.
I don't prefer spicy food.
>> CORRECT!
If I ate spicy food, start the sweat like a waterfall and then later I have to live in bathroom.
>> If I eat spicy food, I start sweating like a waterfall, and then later I have to live in the  bathroom.

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