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I like going together and going alone.

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I like going together and going alone.
Traveling alone makes me more mature.
I think you can learn about differences in thoughts, bad habits, and good behavior that you didn't know.
On the other hand, traveling together makes better memories.
When I am with someone, I think that someone is considerate of me and I am also considerate of others.
So I think both are good trips.

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Hi Da Hye,

Great job on your homework! I really liked how you talked about the benefits of both solo and group travel. Traveling alone helps you grow and become more mature. It lets you learn about different thoughts, habits, and behaviors that you might not have known before. On the other hand, traveling with others creates amazing memories. It makes you feel cared for and considerate towards others. I agree with you that both types of trips are good in their own way. They each have something valuable to offer and can teach us important lessons. Keep exploring and enjoying your travels!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I like going together and going alone.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I enjoy going together with others and going alone.

Traveling alone makes me more mature.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Traveling by myself makes me more mature.

I think you can learn about differences in thoughts, bad habits, and good behavior that you didn't know.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I think you will be able to see the differences in thoughts, bad habits, and good behavior that you didn't know about.

On the other hand, traveling together makes better memories.

>>CORRECT

When I am with someone, I think that someone is considerate of me and I am also considerate of others.

>>CORRECT

OR>>When I am with someone, I think that person is considerate of me and I am also considerate of them.

So I think both are good trips.

>>CORRECT

OR>>That¡¯s why I believe both are good options.

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