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What would you say is the biggest challenge about living in a foreign country?

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2023-06-16 1198

회원님의 영작문

The most challenging task would be culture. Especially, it is very demanding when it related to people. Before moving to London, I thought moving would be the most demanding part. This is because I heard various rumors about all the documents requested by landlords. Interestingly the most difficult part was managing relationships with both landlords and real estate agents. Since I am a foreigner who never lived or studied in London, forging a trust-based relationship was difficult. That was the reason why the landlord requested me more than 10 documents to prove my credibility. Also, I learned it is crucial to be polite at any time. Unlike in Asian countries, the whole step was too slow and not friendly to tenants, but I needed to hide my anxiety because there were several times landlords started to skip calls after complaining about whole steps. Throughout the experience, I learned that it is important not to apply my previous experiences in a new environment.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Aciel. I guess for landlords there in London, it is purely business. In addition, they know there will always be tenants looking for a place to stay so customer service or hospitality is not that significant. Anyway, it's good to know you are doing well there and getting the hang of everything. This is a great experience so might as well enjoy it to the fullest. 

The most challenging task would be culture. 
>>> correct  
Especially, it is very demanding when it related to people. 
>>> Especially, it is very demanding when it is related to people.   
>>> OR: Especially, it is very demanding when it relates to people. 
Before moving to London, I thought moving would be the most demanding part. 
>>>   correct  
This is because I heard various rumors about all the documents requested by landlords. 
>>>   correct  
Interestingly, the most difficult part was managing relationships with both landlords and real estate agents. 
>>>   correct  
Since I am a foreigner who never lived or studied in London, forging a trust-based relationship was difficult. 
>>>  correct 
>>> OR: Since I am a foreigner who had never lived or studied in London, creating/establishing a trust-based relationship was difficult.   
That was the reason why the landlord requested me more than 10 documents to prove my credibility. 
>>> correct   
Also, I learned it is crucial to be polite at any time. 
>>>  correct  
Unlike in Asian countries, the whole step was too slow and not friendly to tenants, but I needed to hide my anxiety because there were several times landlords started to skip calls after complaining about whole steps. 
>>>  correct   
Throughout the experience, I learned that it is important not to apply my previous experiences in a new environment.
>>>  correct 
>>> OR: Throughout the experience, I learned that it is important not to impose my previous experiences in a new environment.  
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