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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think the army lifestyle is like?

When I was soldier, I learned many things and met people of various personalities in the military.
I think I did a good job in the army lifestyle. Of course, I make a lot of funny events about me.
I made a many friends there, so I meet them sometimes.
Even them, my military senior lives near my house. I feel it was hard to believe.
There were many fun things, but I received stressed and I think wasted my time.
In addition, sometimes I have nightmares these days.
The story of nightmares is living in the army life again. It's a disaster.
Sometimes I miss my army life, but I never and never want to return.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think the army lifestyle is like?


When I was soldier, I learned many things and met people of various personalities in the military.
>> When I was a soldier, I learned many things and met people of various personalities in the military.
I think I did a good job in the army lifestyle. 
>> I think I did a good job in the army. 
Of course, I make a lot of funny events about me.
>> Of course, I made a lot of funny events.
I made a many friends there, so I meet them sometimes.
>> I made many friends there, so I meet them sometimes.
Even them, my military senior lives near my house. 
>> Even them, one of my military seniors lives near my house. 
I feel it was hard to believe.
>> CORRECT!
There were many fun things, but I received stressed and I think wasted my time.
>> There were many fun things, but I got stressed and I think wasted my time.
In addition, sometimes I have nightmares these days.
>> CORRECT!
The story of nightmares is living in the army life again. 
>> The story of my nightmares is about living in the army life again. 
It's a disaster.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes I miss my army life, but I never and never want to return.
>> CORRECT!
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