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Hi, T.Donna.
I had a hectic day.
Since I took a rest yesterday, I might have an inertia of resting.
Fortunately, today's profit was good, so it made Dr.MJ and me so happy.
Of course, there were a few mistakes by some staff, nevertheless, good profit could cover all bad things.
At lunch time, we ate a lunch box with a special food; onion gimchi.
My mother sent it to me by delivery, and it tasted so good.
After this essay, I am going to call my mother and give thanks to her.
I finished sumission of tax related data.
The tax accounting company which we contracted will calculate the tax by the end of this month.
I am worried if the tax will be higher than I expected.
Accoring to the ability of tax accounting company, tax can vary greatly.
As for my assignment, if there is no big deal at the clinic, I will be happy.
When our work can be done harmouneously, I can feel catharsis.
And, if I can work for a time that I just want, I will be happier.
Working by force is unhappy.
See you tomorrow.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

I guessed that you had a hectic day since your composition came in the evening. Coming from a day of rest can sometimes alter some systems in our daily routine. As a result, you may feel like you are on a 'resting' mode. However as you have stated, you had high profits and Dr. MJ and you are on cloud nine. You just have to keep it up and stay consistent in attaining this profit on a daily basis.

Your mother is the sweetest. By now, you gave her a ring to send your appreciation and best regards. I have never tasted onion Kimchi and I think it is very tasty as I searched it on Google. It made my mouth water.

I never thought that your tax is prorated. So does it mean that as you earn more, you get taxed higher? If this is the case, it will really affect your revenue and Dr. MJ will be sad about that.

Truly, a peaceful and harmonious work relation in the clinic, plus very high profits are a perfect combination for happiness. I always wish you this everyday. In time, when you have paid all your borrowed money and have enough for retirement, you can work only for the time you want. I hope that day will be soon.

You have done very well in presenting logical ideas as well as using excellent vocabulary words that you have never done before. Outstanding job for using them correctly and effectively!

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

I had a hectic day.
>> Correct!

Since I took a rest yesterday, I might have an inertia of resting.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, today's profit was good, so it made Dr.MJ and me so happy.
>> Correct!

Of course, there were a few mistakes by some staff, nevertheless, good profit could cover all bad things.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, we ate a lunch box with a special food; onion gimchi.
>> Correct!
Or: At lunch time, we ate a lunch box with a special food- onion gimchi.

My mother sent it to me by delivery, and it tasted so good.
>> Correct!

After this essay, I am going to call my mother and give thanks to her.
>> Correct!

I finished sumission of tax related data.
>> I finished the submission of tax related data.

The tax accounting company which we contracted will calculate the tax by the end of this month.
>> The tax accounting company which we contracted with will calculate the tax by the end of this month.

I am worried if the tax will be higher than I expected.
>> Correct!

Accoring to the ability of tax accounting company, tax can vary greatly.
>> Correct!

As for my assignment, if there is no big deal at the clinic, I will be happy.
>> Correct!

When our work can be done harmouneously, I can feel catharsis.
>> Correct!
Or: harmoniously 

And, if I can work for a time that I just want, I will be happier.
>> Correct!

Working by force is unhappy.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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