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When I moved into this house 2 years ago, I liked that it was clean and the rent suited to our family economy. However, after moving, it became smaller than the house I lived in before, so it was difficult to arrange furniture or objects. I promised to live a minimalistic life, but it was not easy because everyone in my family was greedy for things. Even now, it's hard because there are so many things compared to the size of the house.

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Good afternoon, Eliana!
I guess you did not see that part that a house is big when it is empty. Then you moved in with your family where it becomes a home because there are things that you can't just leave behind ^^
Have a good afternoon, thank you for letting me read your homework.
Aki~

When I moved into this house 2 years ago, I liked that it was clean and the rent suited to our family economy. 
>>> When I moved into this house 2 years ago, I liked that it was clean and the rent suited to our family economy.

However, after moving, it became smaller than the house I lived in before, so it was difficult to arrange furniture or objects.
>>>> CORRECT!

I promised to live a minimalistic life, but it was not easy because everyone in my family was greedy for things. 
>>>> CORRECT!

Even now, it's hard because there are so many things compared to the size of the house.
>>>> CORRECT!
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