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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of camping?

In fact, I don\'t never try it go to camping, so I don\'t know well.
But, let me tell you what I thought about the pros and cons of camping.
1st, the biggest pros is relax trip.
Camping is a relaxing trip more than another trips.
2nd, if you go to camping with your close friends or family, it\'s make a good memory.
Nevertheless, camping is also have a cons.
1st cons is if you sleep outside can be uncomfortable.
Because of hot, cold temperature or bugs.
2nd, camping trip is sensitive the weather. This is an outdoor trip, so if the weather is bad
you maybe have to give up the camping.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of camping?


In fact, I don\'t never try it go to camping, so I don\'t know well.
>> In fact, I have never tried camping, so I don't know it well.
But, let me tell you what I thought about the pros and cons of camping.
>> CORRECT!
1st, the biggest pros is relax trip.
>> Firstly, the biggest pros is a relaxing trip.
Camping is a relaxing trip more than another trips.
>> CORRECT!
2nd, if you go to camping with your close friends or family, it\'s make a good memory.
>> Secondly, if you go camping with your close friends or family, it makes a good memory.
OR >> Secondly, if you go camping with your close friends or family, it gives you  good memories.
Nevertheless, camping is also have a cons.
>> Nevertheless, camping also has cons.
1st cons is if you sleep outside can be uncomfortable.
>> The first disadvantage is if you sleep outside, it can be uncomfortable.
Because of hot, cold temperature or bugs.
>> That's because of hot and cold temperature, or bugs.
2nd, camping trip is sensitive the weather. 
>> Secondly, a camping trip makes you sensitive to the weather. 
This is an outdoor trip, so if the weather is bad, you maybe have to give up the camping.
>> This is an outdoor trip, so if the weather is bad, you maybe have to give up camping.

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