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Hi, T.Donna.
It's our lunch time.
After a long time, I ate my lunch alone.
There was not crowded at the clinic this morning than expected.
But, you know me.
I enjoyed this time.
When I am busy, I can get more profit.
Otherwise, when I am not busy, I can do many things without urgency.
As we expected, Dr.MJ checked the clinic through the CCTV every 30 minutes and asked me if the profit is good or not so many times.
He should've worked today instead of resting.
Since I have a meeting with my friends this evening, I am writing my essay now.
I am looking forward to the meeting.
As for my assignment, it can't be done with one simple way.
To achieve success, we need both of patience and boldness.
Of course, we need also eagarness.
I've learned braveness and taking risk from Dr. MJ, while he has learned patience and being stable from me.
That's why we have a synergistic strength.
Singapore trip is coming, so that I have to check the itinerary soon.
This is a pleasant day.
See you tomorrow.

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Hello there, Dr. Kim!

Finally, Dr. MJ took a break from work and you can feel more independent and free in your clinic devoid of his presence. I wonder what is going to happen to your clinic when you will be on a day off and Dr. MJ will be in-charge... I hope no one will resign. Of course, we know that he means it well in everything he does when he checks on all of you every now and then.

Anyway, thank you so much for being very consistent in submitting your compositions. I wish you and your friends will have a big blast as you drink and just be merry tonight. After all, tomorrow, it is also your turn to take your day off. Hence, make the most out of it.

Synergy is one powerful and necessary word in the workforce. If you, D. MJ, and all the clinic staff will work as one, profit will flow abundantly as the Han River. 

So, how is your Singapore plan? It will surely be an unforgettable one.

Please go over my suggestions and see you soon!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It's our lunch time.
>> Correct!

After a long time, I ate my lunch alone.
>> Correct!

There was not crowded at the clinic this morning than expected.
>>  It was not crowded at the clinic this morning than expected.

But, you know me.
>> Correct!

I enjoyed this time.
>> Correct!

When I am busy, I can get more profit.
>> Correct!

Otherwise, when I am not busy, I can do many things without urgency.
>> Correct!

As we expected, Dr.MJ checked the clinic through the CCTV every 30 minutes and asked me if the profit is good or not so many times.
>> Correct!

He should've worked today instead of resting.
>> Correct!

Since I have a meeting with my friends this evening, I am writing my essay now.
>> Correct!

I am looking forward to the meeting.
>> Correct!

As for my assignment, it can't be done with one simple way.
>> Correct!

To achieve success, we need both of patience and boldness.
>> Correct!

Of course, we need also eagarness.
>> Correct!
Or: eagerness

I've learned braveness and taking risk from Dr. MJ, while he has learned patience and being stable from me.
>> I've learned braveness and taking risks from Dr. MJ, while he has learned patience and being stable from me.

That's why we have a synergistic strength.
>> Correct!

Singapore trip is coming, so that I have to check the itinerary soon.
>> The Singapore trip is coming, so that I have to check the itinerary soon.

This is a pleasant day.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow
>> Correct!
Or: See you tomorrow.
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