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Hi.
First of all, I apologize that I didn't attend the last Friday class.
Last Thursday evening, one of my friend really wanted to see me suddenly, so I couldn't reject.
As you can guess, I couldn't have enough sleep that night, so I was forced to cancel my class.
Meanwhile, another friend who is a boss of small entertainment company visited us last Friday.
Since he helped us many times with his entertainment business, especially entertainer advertisement, Dr.MJ and I always thanks to him.
Hence, we gave him a special laser treatment, and he was fully satisfied with it.
At lunch time, we had a grilled beef with hot soup.
Since I knew that he got a diabetes, I asked him about it.
He replied that his disease got worse, so he injected an insulin everyday.
We comforted him about it.
That restaurant has an icecream bar.
After we've done with our lunch, Dr. MJ picked up the icecream too much and gave it to him.
So, I said, "Do you want him die for hyperglycemia?".
And, we laughed together.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

First of all, thank you for being so diligent. I cannot beat your energy and efficiency in doing work. Nevertheless, I apologize for the late revert to this composition.

My aunt (mother's sister) came over from Canada and we had some quality time with my family. Further, today is the 125th Independence Day in the Philippines, hence it is a holiday. So, we were on a relaxed mode on a stormy day.

It can be difficult to say no to an invitation when your friends are also your colleagues and franchise members. I hope that your pal will heal from his diabetes. Injecting insulin tells us that he has some serious maintenance for his illness. It is always a great joy to know that you had a fantastic time with them.

Dr. MJ has some dark humor in a nutshell.^^

Kindly study my grammar suggestions. Since your sentences are longer, they display more quality and the application of grammar rules. A job well done!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

First of all, I apologize that I didn't attend the last Friday class.
>> Correct!

Last Thursday evening, one of my friend really wanted to see me suddenly, so I couldn't reject.
>>Last Thursday evening, one of my friends really wanted to see me suddenly, so I couldn't reject it.

As you can guess, I couldn't have enough sleep that night, so I was forced to cancel my class.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, another friend who is a boss of small entertainment company visited us last Friday.
>> Meanwhile, another friend who is a boss of a small entertainment company visited us last Friday.

Since he helped us many times with his entertainment business, especially entertainer advertisement, Dr.MJ and I always thanks to him.
>> Since he helped us many times with his entertainment business, especially entertainer advertisement, Dr. MJ and I always thank him.

Hence, we gave him a special laser treatment, and he was fully satisfied with it.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, we had a grilled beef with hot soup.
>> At lunch time, we had grilled beef with hot soup.

Since I knew that he got a diabetes, I asked him about it.
>> Since I knew that he got diabetes, I asked him about it.

He replied that his disease got worse, so he injected an insulin everyday.
>> He replied that his disease got worse, so he injected insulin everyday.

We comforted him about it.
>> Correct!

That restaurant has an icecream bar.
>> Correct!

After we've done with our lunch, Dr. MJ picked up the icecream too much and gave it to him.
>> After we were done with our lunch, Dr. MJ picked up too much ice-cream and gave it to him.

So, I said, "Do you want him die for hyperglycemia?".
>> So, I said, "Do you want him to die of hyperglycemia?".

And, we laughed together.
>> Correct!

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