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What healthy habits do you have such as washing your hands before eating?

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I think I'm a person who quite pursue healthy life style.
First, I tried to go to bed early compared to other university students. It's around 12:30 a.m. when I go to sleep and I usually wake up 7 a.m. It can help me to take classes in awaken state. Also, I feel better in the morning about starting my day more brightly.
Secondly, I don't lie right after eating foods. I have sufficient time to digest through walking or doing something. Even I avoid sitting on the chair because it also feels bloated. If I lie on bed after eating dinner, the foods will flow backward.
Finally, I try not to eat something after 6 p.m.. I seek the state of empty stomach for 12 hours but it's inevitable if I have dinner with others. I think it's one of the most difficult habits to observe. And nowadays, I eat desserts containing so much sugar and fats after 6 p.m. on the excuse of supplement of sugar for studying. I have to restrict the consuming of fattening food.

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Hi, Ko Eun! 
Based on your answers, I agree, you tend to have a healthy lifestyle. It's nice that you have self-control and discipline when it comes to the activities you do right after eating. I hope I can also have the same discipline so I can reduce weight. By the way, great job on your composition. Just minor corrections to take note of. 
-T. Caitlyn
I think I'm a person who quite pursue healthy life style.
>> I think I'm a person who quite pursues a healthy lifestyle.
First, I tried to go to bed early compared to other university students. 
>> CORRECT
It's around 12:30 a.m. when I go to sleep and I usually wake up 7 a.m. 
>> I usually go to sleep at around 12:30 am and wake up at 7 am.
It can help me to take classes in awaken state. 
>> It can help me to take classes in an awakened state.
Also, I feel better in the morning about starting my day more brightly.
>> CORRECT
Secondly, I don't lie right after eating foods. 
>> Secondly, I don't lie right after eating food.
I have sufficient time to digest through walking or doing something. 
>> CORRECT
Even I avoid sitting on the chair because it also feels bloated. 
>> I even avoid sitting on a chair because it also makes me feel bloated.
If I lie on bed after eating dinner, the foods will flow backward.
>>  If I lie on the bed after eating dinner, the food will flow backward.
Finally, I try not to eat something after 6 p.m.. 
>> CORRECT
I seek the state of empty stomach for 12 hours but it's inevitable if I have dinner with others. 
>> CORRECT
I think it's one of the most difficult habits to observe. 
>> CORRECT
And nowadays, I eat desserts containing so much sugar and fats after 6 p.m. on the excuse of supplement of sugar for studying. 
>> And nowadays, I eat desserts containing so much sugar and fats after 6 p.m. with the excuse of supplementing sugar for studying.
I have to restrict the consuming of fattening food.
>> I have to restrict the consumption of fattening food.
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