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How do you know when to stop eating? Is it easy to eat too much?

작성자: 이*은
2023-06-08 1023

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In my case, it is not that easy to stop eating foods because I have a habit of not remaining foods. Even though I feel full, I don't stop consuming something that is in front of me. And the main problem is when I eat desserts including much more sugar and fats after I eat rice. However, it is clear that when I saw the others seems to stop eating, then I quit eating. But it's not the radical solution. So, the solution of the overeating is reducing the possibilities of eating by putting small amounts of foods. Once the snacks or desserts are removed from my sights, I don't think about it anymore. If I want to eat more, then I have to stand up and move toward to reach them. So it's hard to eat more. Furthermore, The additional resolution of ceasing eating can be preparing less kind of foods when we dine. It was proved that it is true that when we see various kinds of food, we are likely to eat more by psychological research findings.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Thursday, Ko Eun!
I have the same sentiments as you. I am also the type of person who doesn't want to leave any food and will consume whatever is in front of me. It is very hard to control, especially if we see appetizing food in front of us. So, I think the solutions that you've mentioned can really help when it comes to controlling food intake.
- T. Caitlyn
In my case, it is not that easy to stop eating foods because I have a habit of not remaining foods. 
>> In my case, it's not easy to stop eating food because I have a habit of not leaving any food.
Even though I feel full, I don't stop consuming something that is in front of me. 
>> CORRECT
And the main problem is when I eat desserts including much more sugar and fats after I eat rice. 
>> And the main problem is when I eat desserts containing so much sugar and fats after I eat rice. 
However, it is clear that when I saw the others seems to stop eating, then I quit eating. 
>> However, if I saw that it seems like the others stopped eating, then I quit eating as well.
But it's not the radical solution.
>> CORRECT
So, the solution of the overeating is reducing the possibilities of eating by putting small amounts of foods. 
>> So, one possible solution to overeating is to limit food availability by only getting smaller portions.
Once the snacks or desserts are removed from my sights, I don't think about it anymore. 
>> Once the snacks or desserts are removed from my sight, I don't think about it anymore.
If I want to eat more, then I have to stand up and move toward to reach them. 
>> CORRECT
So it's hard to eat more. 
>> CORRECT
Furthermore, The additional resolution of ceasing eating can be preparing less kind of foods when we dine. 
>> Furthermore, the additional solution to cease eating is by preparing fewer kinds of foods when we dine. 
It was proved that it is true that when we see various kinds of food, we are likely to eat more by psychological research findings.
>> It was proven through psychological research that when we see various kinds of food, we are likely to eat more.
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