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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is urban gardening? What are the advantages and disadvantages of urban gardening?

Urban gardening is on the roof of building or on a balcony, without go to far away,
It is make a garden that I want.
Recently, many common gardens are built near the park.
This advantage is if my hobby is growing plants and if I live in the city.
It will be a good hobby.
This can also make me productive and give me a sense of psychological stability.
However, disadvantage is the manage should be often.
This is because if bugs occur, they can be transfer to other plants quickly.
In addition, have to manage temperature,
humidity, and water depending on the plant
it's more difficult then I thought it.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is urban gardening? What are the advantages and disadvantages of urban gardening?


Urban gardening is on the roof of building or on a balcony, without go to far away,
It is make a garden that I want.
>> Urban gardening is done on the roof of a building or on a balcony, without going far away, and it is a garden that I want to make.
Recently, many common gardens are built near the park.
>> CORRECT! 
This advantage is if my hobby is growing plants and if I live in the city.
It will be a good hobby.
>> One of the advantages is, if my hobby is growing plants and if I live in the city, it will be a good hobby.
This can also make me productive and give me a sense of psychological stability.
>> CORRECT! 
However, disadvantage is the manage should be often.
>> However, the disadvantage is that it should be managed often.
This is because if bugs occur, they can be transfer to other plants quickly.
>> This is because if bugs occur, they can transfer to other plants quickly.
OR >> This is because if bugs occur, they can be transferred to other plants quickly.
In addition, have to manage temperature, humidity, and water depending on the plant it's more difficult then I thought it.
>> In addition, you have to manage the temperature, humidity, and water depending on the plant; it's more difficult than I thought it.
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