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What are the things that you don\'t like about dancing?

작성자: 이*은
2023-06-05 705

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When I think about dance skills comparing to others, it sometimes makes me frustrated because of the fact there is no limit. The think is even continued to I have no reason to dance anymore. The gap of dance quality must be present by the time when they started to dance, the quantity that they exerted to dancing, and whether they have innated dance ability. The time when this gap get manifested is a competition among university club dancers. I think I quite practic dance hard but the inborn ability fall behind. Many seniors and friends who watched my dance say, 'You're talented enough.' But I don't think so and cannot satisfied with my dance. It's paradox because I love my dance so I put my effort and time into practicing but otherwise, I consider it as wasting of time. But I tried to overcome this negative thinking. One of my solutions to not getting stress from dance is not thinking about victory and defeat. Just focusing on my feelings when I dance.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Ko Eun.
I agree with you. Even if we love doing something, there are really times that we question our ability and it makes us think about whether to continue or not. I think not thinking about winning or losing is hard, especially in competitions, but I believe you can do it because of your love for your passion.
- T. Caitlyn
When I think about dance skills comparing to others, it sometimes makes me frustrated because of the fact there is no limit.
>> When I think about my dance skills compared to others, it sometimes makes me frustrated because of the fact there is no limit.
The think is even continued to I have no reason to dance anymore. 
>> When I think about this, it's like I don't have a reason to dance anymore.
The gap of dance quality must be present by the time when they started to dance, the quantity that they exerted to dancing, and whether they have innated dance ability. 
>> The gap in dance quality must be present by the time they started to dance, the quantity that they exerted to dancing, and whether they have innated dance ability.
The time when this gap get manifested is a competition among university club dancers. 
>> The time when this gap gets manifested is during competitions among university club dancers
I think I quite practic dance hard but the inborn ability fall behind. 
>> I think I quite practice dancing hard but I lack in inborn ability.
Many seniors and friends who watched my dance say, 'You're talented enough.' But I don't think so and cannot satisfied with my dance. 
>> CORRECT
It's paradox because I love my dance so I put my effort and time into practicing but otherwise, I consider it as wasting of time. 
>> It's paradoxical because I love my dance, so I put effort and time into practicing, but otherwise, I consider it a waste of time.
But I tried to overcome this negative thinking. 
>> CORRECT
One of my solutions to not getting stress from dance is not thinking about victory and defeat. 
>> One of my solutions to not get stressed from dance is not thinking about victory and defeat. 
Just focusing on my feelings when I dance.
>> CORRECT
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