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When can development and progress be negative?

작성자: 이*은
2023-06-05 656

회원님의 영작문

It is a common belief that development is good thing for human beings. However, I firmly believe that progress have much more negative effects on environment, both the earth and people. To begin with, the untouched lands are dissappearing so the nature's function of reducing carbon dioxide cannot be activated well. As a result, greenhouse effect is getting stronger. Also the deforestation for construction of industrial development should be regulated.
On top of that, people are more nervous and stressful because of the high level of competition caused by progess. There is no limit about people's aspiration toward economical growth. They must be tired of the state of being strained.
To sum up, devastating environmental illness and dramatic human stress show that progress could be negative part although they have a lot of benefits.For these reason, development should be done by preserving the ecosystem and caring about human beings.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Ko Eun!
Thank you for giving a comprehensive composition in your homework. You did very well in explaining the negative effects of progress and I couldn't agree more. There are minor grammar slips but don't worry, I can see your improvement in writing.
- T. Caitlyn
It is a common belief that development is good thing for human beings. 
>> It is a common belief that development is a good thing for human beings. 
However, I firmly believe that progress have much more negative effects on environment, both the earth and people. 
>> However, I firmly believe that progress has many more negative effects on the environment, both the earth and people. 
To begin with, the untouched lands are dissappearing so the nature's function of reducing carbon dioxide cannot be activated well. 
>> To begin with, untouched lands are disappearing so nature's function of reducing carbon dioxide cannot be activated well.
As a result, greenhouse effect is getting stronger. 
>> As a result, the greenhouse effect is getting stronger.
Also the deforestation for construction of industrial development should be regulated.
>>  Also, deforestation for the construction of industrial development should be regulated.
On top of that, people are more nervous and stressful because of the high level of competition caused by progess. 
>> On top of that, people are more nervous and stressed because of the high level of competition caused by progress.
There is no limit about people's aspiration toward economical growth. 
>> There is no limit to people's aspirations toward economic growth. 
They must be tired of the state of being strained.
>> CORRECT
To sum up, devastating environmental illness and dramatic human stress show that progress could be negative part although they have a lot of benefits.
>> To sum up, devastating environmental illness and dramatic human stress show that progress could be a negative part although they have a lot of benefits.
For these reason, development should be done by preserving the ecosystem and caring about human beings.
>> For these reasons, development should be done by preserving the ecosystem and caring about human beings.
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