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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What would you like to achieve in your life?

I have a new goal recently.
It is to study English a lot and travel to many countries.
When I visited abroad recently, I was still lacking English, but I get confidence.
And I felt the charm of other countries that Through English.
This part give me big impetus and aware know of the my level.
In other words, it motivated me.
If I question from English, almost people answered in English.
The shocking that their mother tongue is not English.
Therefore, my new goal is to study English steady and solve difficult English conversations.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What would you like to achieve in your life?


I have a new goal recently.
>> CORRECT! 
It is to study English a lot and travel to many countries.
>> CORRECT! 
When I visited abroad recently, I was still lacking English, but I get confidence.
>> When I visited abroad recently, I was still lacking English skills, but I got confidence in speaking.
And I felt the charm of other countries that Through English.
>> I felt the charm of other countries through the English language.
This part give me big impetus and aware know of the my level.
>> This part gave me a big impetus and awareness about my level.
In other words, it motivated me.
>> CORRECT! 
If I question from English, almost people answered in English.
>> If I ask questions in English, almost all people answer in English.
The shocking that their mother tongue is not English.
>> It's shocking that their mother tongue is not English.
Therefore, my new goal is to study English steady and solve difficult English conversations.
>> CORRECT! 

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