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2023-06-01 723

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Hello.
Today is the first day of a new month; June.
Because I stayed up too late last night, I was fatigued all day.
Fortunately, our government allows all people can take off the mask in the clinic and hospital from today.
That's why I could stand all my work.
I really hoped if I would take off a mask, and it came true.
I felt so happy about it.
Anyway, as for my assignment, I have many things to tell you.
One day, I enjoyed supper with my friends in some tuna restaurant.
We visited there for the first time, and we were satisfied with the taste of food.
But, something happened.
The boss of the restaurant tried to join us with his wine.
Maybe, he was pleased, because we ordered the expensive courses.
He told us about the good things of president Moon suddenly.
At that time, most doctors struggled with the gorvenment, so I asked him to stop talking about the president.
He got mad and screamed, "Why did you guys come to my restaurant? Go away!"
Can you believe this situation?
See you.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good evening, Dr. Kim!

I apologize for the long delay of evaluating your homework. As the tail of the typhoon left fallen leaves and a messy ground, I fixed these all and I was beat in the afternoon. Nonetheless, here it is.

Yes, a new month unfolds. Here in the Philippines, as you welcome summer in South Korea, the rainy season is here to stay for around four months. I reckon the times during COVID-19, my life was  full of debts and I cannot sleep. Now, I feel as free as a bird in the sky. Let us make the most out of this new month. 

As COVID- 19's effects weaken, we can simply live our lives and keep pushing.

The case of the drunk restaurant CEO is a reflection of polarization of politics in society. This is common in my country during elections. People start getting irrational and unreasonable for their candidates and start unfriending people on social media. In the end, the winning president does not even know us and will not care about our welfare. ^^ Seriously, these leaders are the makers of the laws and policies of the future. Meanwhile, the restaurant owner's task is to serve you sumptuous food. He has no right to approach you and insist his political stance. Worst, he should have never humiliates and booted you out when you paid for his food. I hope he felt remorse about his actions.

Please take note of the underlined words below. Study them well.  This is a very interesting writing due to the story elements. Excellent job!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

Today is the first day of a new month; June.
>> Correct!
Or: Today is the first day of the month of June.

Because I stayed up too late last night, I was fatigued all day.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, our government allows all people can take off the mask in the clinic and hospital from today.
>> Fortunately, our government allows all people to take off the mask in the clinic and hospital from today.

That's why I could stand all my work.
>> Correct! 

I really hoped if I would take off a mask, and it came true.
>> I really hoped if I could take off a mask, and it came true.

I felt so happy about it.
>> Correct!

Anyway, as for my assignment, I have many things to tell you.
>> Correct!

One day, I enjoyed supper with my friends in some tuna restaurant.
>> Correct!

We visited there for the first time, and we were satisfied with the taste of food.
>> Correct!

But, something happened.
>> Correct!

The boss of the restaurant tried to join us with his wine.
>> Correct!

Maybe, he was pleased, because we ordered the expensive courses.
>> Correct!

He told us about the good things of president Moon suddenly.
>> Correct!

At that time, most doctors struggled with the gorvenment, so I asked him to stop talking about the president.
>> Correct!
Or: government 

He got mad and screamed, "Why did you guys come to my restaurant? Go away!"
>> Correct! Perfect use of punctuation marks!

Can you believe this situation?
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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