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On my birthday after military I didn't receive any gift, message, and congratulation from the friends of high school. I got disappointed and thought that the relationship is not important in my life and it couldn't build the good relationship whether I put an effort or not. So, there's one who will stay. :)

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Happy Friday, Elic! You are interested in learning, listens attentively, and makes a solid effort to avoid distractions that could interrupt the learning process. You show responsibility and follows directions whenever they are given. Keep up the good work. AWESOME.

On my birthday after military I didn't receive any gift, message, and congratulation from the friends of high school. 
>>> On my birthday after the military, I didn't receive any gifts, messages, or congratulations from high school friends.

I got disappointed and thought that the relationship is not important in my life and it couldn't build the good relationship whether I put an effort or not.
>>> I got disappointed and thought that the relationship was not important in my life and that it couldn't build a good relationship whether I put in an effort or not.

So, there's one who will stay.
>>> CORRECT.
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