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How do you handle conflicts or disagreements?

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I am trying to find out all the facts and being clear of what's wrong and then I am thinking over whether I will talk to him about it or not.
If I decide not to tell him it, I consider like it doesn't happen.
However if I set the mind to have some time to talk about it with him, I talk to him.
Most of all, I am trying to listen up him first, and then I talk to him about what I want to do or what he wants me to do. If I need to apologize, I do it from the bottom of my heart.
From here, most of the important thing is to have some conversation time together. We don't know each other without conversation.
I know, sometimes this way is making worse so we need to be ready to respect each other druing conversation.
Anyway it works well for us so far. That is my one of the way to deal conflicts with my husband.

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Hi Demi!
I think having practice writing like this would do you some good.
It would teach you to be more mindful of your sentence construction.
Keep it up.
Take note of the suggestions below.
I made your sentences simpler and more approachable.
We can discuss them more if you have questions.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I am trying to find out all the facts and being clear of what's wrong and then I am thinking over whether I will talk to him about it or not.
>> I try to find out all the facts for me to be clear on what's wrong and then I think whether I will talk to him or not. 
If I decide not to tell him it, I consider like it doesn't happen.
>> If I decide not to tell him about it, I just pretend that nothing happened.
However if I set the mind to have some time to talk about it with him, I talk to him.
>> However if I set my mind to set aside time to talk about it with him, I do it.
Most of all, I am trying to listen up him first, and then I talk to him about what I want to do or what he wants me to do. 
>> Most importantly, I try to listen to him first, and then I talk to him about what I want to do or what he wants me to do. 
If I need to apologize, I do it from the bottom of my heart.
>> Correct
From here, most of the important thing is to have some conversation time together.
>> From there, it is very important to have a conversation.
We don't know each other without conversation.
>> We wouldn't understand each other if we choose not to talk.
I know, sometimes this way is making worse so we need to be ready to respect each other druing conversation.
>> I know, sometimes, things could get worse so we need to be ready to respect each other while having a conversation.
Anyway it works well for us so far. 
>> Anyway, it works well for us so far. 
That is my one of the way to deal conflicts with my husband.
>> That is one of the ways to deal with conflicts with my husband.
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