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In mt opinion, people who feel sad come out outside and activity good for to cope sadness.
For example playing tennis and walking around park.
We feel disappear emotion of sad when our body moving after these activities.
Furthermore we can feel positive energy through activities.

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Thanks, Sae Bom!

Sadness is characterized by a low mood or feeling down, often in response to something that was disappointing or discouraging, or caused other negative feelings. Sadness can happen on its own, but is usually relieved by the passage of time, self-care activities, or doing something you enjoy to cheer yourself up.

- Kristine ^^

In mt opinion, people who feel sad come out outside and activity good for to cope sadness.
>> In my opinion, people who are depressed should go outside and engage in activities that help them to cope sadness.
For example playing tennis and walking around park.
>> For example, walking around the park and playing tennis.
We feel disappear emotion of sad when our body moving after these activities.
>> We feel that our sad feelings fade when we move our bodies.
Furthermore we can feel positive energy through activities.
>> We might also feel positive energy from doing those activities.
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