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I learned about many wars including World War 1 and the second World War in history classes. And I realized most of the wars were associated with strong interest. Wars related with resources, wars over some territory, and wars to get more colonies. Of course ,throughout all the history there were many wars for independence or social justice. Though, we can see some countries wage wars for their benefit or wealth. I think those countries will be destroyed and lost their precious cultural heritage.

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I learned about many wars including World War 1 and the second World War in history classes.
>> CORRECT! 
OR >> I learned about many wars including First World War and the Second World War in history classes.
And I realized most of the wars were associated with strong interest. 
>> CORRECT! 
Wars related with resources, wars over some territory, and wars to get more colonies. 
>> Examples of these wars are related to resources, wars over some territory, and wars to get more colonies. 
Of course, throughout all the history there were many wars for independence or social justice.
>> CORRECT! 
Though, we can see some countries wage wars for their benefit or wealth. 
>> CORRECT! 
I think those countries will be destroyed and lost their precious cultural heritage.
>> CORRECT! 

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