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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Is it always necessary to follow fashion trends?

I think the trends is something that other people can follow, not my own.
If I have a good sense of fashion style and understand of clothes, I don't necessary to follow the trend.
But, It's unfortunate, that's not apply to me.
So, my fashion style is similarly to other people's style.
In this case, I often faced the people with the same fashion style as me on the street, in the shopping malls,etc and then I felt ashamed.
In South Korea, this fashion called "clone fashion".
It's because they are wearing the same clothes like cloned robots.
This phenomenon appeared because it was the most accessible and to popular.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Is it always necessary to follow fashion trends?


I think the trends is something that other people can follow, not my own.
>> I think the trends are something that other people can follow, not my own.
If I have a good sense of fashion style and understand of clothes, I don't necessary to follow the trend.
>> If I have a good sense of fashion and understanding of clothes, it is not necessary to follow the trend.
But, It's unfortunate, that's not apply to me.
>> But unfortunately, that does not apply to me.
So, my fashion style is similarly to other people's style.
>> So, my fashion style is similar to other people's style.
In this case, I often faced the people with the same fashion style as me on the street, in the shopping malls,etc and then I felt ashamed.
>> In this case, I often see people with the same fashion style as me on the street, in the shopping malls, or anywhere, and then I sometimes feel ashamed.
In South Korea, this fashion called "clone fashion".
>> In South Korea, this fashion style is called "clone fashion".
It's because they are wearing the same clothes like cloned robots.
>> CORRECT! 
This phenomenon appeared because it was the most accessible and to popular.
>> This phenomenon appeared because it was the most accessible and popular among people.

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