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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the effects of illegal logging?

Illegal logging has a various problems.
Wild animals homes disappear and ecosystems are destroyed.
The Amazon is one of the largest forests on Earth, is now one of the place to illegally logging.
I saw a news about Amazon forests that 150 soccer fields are disappearing every hour.
Doing illegal logging people are only for tree harvesting and they don't care about forest protection.
Destruction of forest, the number of animals is disappearing and the Earth become abnormal climate
and air quality are also getting worse.
I heard that the solution is not yet.
In my opinion, conservation of nature will be difficult in reality.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the effects of illegal logging?


Illegal logging has a various problems.
>> CORRECT! 
Wild animals homes disappear and ecosystems are destroyed.
>> Wild animals' homes disappear and ecosystems are destroyed.
The Amazon is one of the largest forests on Earth, is now one of the place to illegally logging.
>> The Amazon is one of the largest forests on Earth, is now one of the place to do illegal logging.
I saw a news about Amazon forests that 150 soccer fields are disappearing every hour.
>> I saw a news about the Amazon rainforests that 150 soccer fields are disappearing every hour.
Doing illegal logging people are only for tree harvesting and they don't care about forest protection.
>> Illegal loggers are only for tree harvesting and they don't care about forest protection.
Destruction of forest, the number of animals is disappearing and the Earth become abnormal climate
and air quality are also getting worse.
>> Because of deforestation, the number of animals is disappearing, the Earth experiences an abnormal climateand the air quality is also getting worse.
I heard that the solution is not yet.
>> I heard that there's no solution for it yet.
In my opinion, conservation of nature will be difficult in reality.
>> CORRECT! 

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