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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous natural disaster?

There are many kinds of natural disaster on the earth where we live.
Like a Floods, earthquakes, droughts, heat waves(Tsunami) , etc
In my opinion, the most dangerous natural disaster is earthquake.
The reason why, it is can bring about various natural disasters at one.
Other natural disasters can able to prevent.
On the other way, earthquakes is difficult to prevent.
If there is a big earthquake in the sea, it is make tsunami or
if there is occurs in mountain, it is also make landslide.
A few years ago,I have experienced a low-scale earthquake.
The water in the fishbowl shook, I felt unpleasant, like a strange as if I become dust in space.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous natural disaster?


There are many kinds of natural disaster on the earth where we live.
>> There are many kinds of natural disasters on the earth where we live in.
Like a Floods, earthquakes, droughts, heat waves(Tsunami) , etc
>> We have floods, earthquakes, droughts, heat waves (Tsunami), etc.
OR >>  We have floods, earthquakes, droughts, heat waves (Tsunami), and others.
In my opinion, the most dangerous natural disaster is earthquake.
>> CORRECT! 
The reason why, it is can bring about various natural disasters at one.
>> The reason why it's dangerous is because it can bring various natural disasters at once.
Other natural disasters can able to prevent.
>> Other natural disasters can be prevented.
On the other way, earthquakes is difficult to prevent.
>> On the other hand, earthquakes are difficult to prevent.
If there is a big earthquake in the sea, it is make tsunami or
if there is occurs in mountain, it is also make landslide.
>> If there is a big earthquake in the sea, it creates a tsunami, or if it occurs in a mountain, it also make landslides.
A few years ago, I have experienced a low-scale earthquake.
>> CORRECT! 
The water in the fishbowl shook, I felt unpleasant, like a strange as if I become dust in space.
>> The water in the fishbowl shook, I felt unpleasant, like a strange feeling as if I became a dust in space.

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