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The house I live in now is lined with shops, and only my family lives on the 4th floor of one of them.
That's why I only say hello to the people in the mall downstairs.
The house I lived in before was a 4-story villa, and there were 8 houses living there.
I greeted and stayed with the neighbors in the same villa, and there were many close neighbors in the neighborhood.
If the weather was good, we would meet at the playground, play with the children, share snacks, and go to pretty cafes or restaurants.
I also attended events at the children's school.
The house and neighbors back then were much better than they are now.

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Hello there, Eliana!
I love the way you compared your previous to your current place where you are living. There are some changes in life that we really need to consider and sacrifice for the sake of our loved ones. Well, I hope that the place you are living in now will create good memories like what  you used to have :)  Enjoy your day!
Aki~


The house I live in now is lined with shops, and only my family lives on the 4th floor of one of them.
>>> The house I live in now is lined with shops, and only my family lives on the 4th floor.
>>> The building where I live now is occupied by shops and only my family lives on the 4th floor.

That's why I only say hello to the people in the mall downstairs.
>>> CORRECT!

The house I lived in before was a 4-story villa, and there were 8 houses living there.
>>> CORRECT!

I greeted and stayed with the neighbors in the same villa, and there were many close neighbors in the neighborhood.
>>> CORRECT!

If the weather was good, we would meet at the playground, play with the children, share snacks, and go to pretty cafes or restaurants.
>>> CORRECT!

I also attended events at the children's school.
>>> CORRECT!

The house and neighbors back then were much better than they are now.
>>> CORRECT!
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