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Do you prefer hot countries or cool countries when you go on holoday? Why?

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2023-05-23 349

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It is important to consider the climates of countries when I travel abroad. It is because according to the place where I visit is hot or cold, many things will considerably different like clothes, foods and activities. In this instance, I prefer to go warm countries for traveling. When it comes to the clothes, if I go South-East Asia, I don't need to bring thick clothes. Thus, I can choose various kinds of light clothes and it could be more fashionable journey.
Furthermore, when it comes to the activities, I can enjoy swimming in the outside pool and summer beach. Cool countries also have swimming pool in the hotel. But I like to swim in hot weather because when I run in to the water, it feels more like icey. And When I walk around for sightseeing, I can endure hot weather but not freezing weather. However, I have never been to go cold countries , so I want to go there in the future. Then, I think I could change my mind and preference.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Tuesday, Ko Eun.
You are correct. Season and climate of a place are some factors we should consider as it will affect the things we should be bringing.
-T. Caitlyn
It is important to consider the climates of countries when I travel abroad. 
>> CORRECT
It is because according to the place where I visit is hot or cold, many things will considerably different like clothes, foods and activities. 
>> It is because many things will be considerably different, such as clothes, food, and activities when going to either cold or hot places.
In this instance, I prefer to go warm countries for traveling. 
>> In this instance, I prefer warm countries for traveling. 
When it comes to the clothes, if I go South-East Asia, I don't need to bring thick clothes. 
>> When it comes to the clothes, if I go to Southeast Asia, I don't need to bring thick clothes. 
Thus, I can choose various kinds of light clothes and it could be more fashionable journey.
>> Thus, I can choose various kinds of light clothes and be more fashionable during the journey.
Furthermore, when it comes to the activities, I can enjoy swimming in the outside pool and summer beach. 
>> CORRECT
Cool countries also have swimming pool in the hotel. 
>> CORRECT
But I like to swim in hot weather because when I run in to the water, it feels more like icey. 
>> But I like to swim in hot weather because when I run in to the water, it feels cooler. 
And When I walk around for sightseeing, I can endure hot weather but not freezing weather. 
>> And while walking around sightseeing, I can endure the hot weather but not the freezing weather.
However, I have never been to go cold countries , so I want to go there in the future. 
>> However, I have never been to cold countries so I want to go there in the future.
Then, I think I could change my mind and preference.
>> CORRECT
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