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Do you prefer to travel alone or in a group? why?

작성자: 이*은
2023-05-22 945

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I think I prefer to travel in a group. If I accompany with my family or friends, the journey could be a more rich experience. When we walk around some tourist attractions together, we can take pictures of one another. Also, we can eat various kinds of foods and try some street foods more easily. For this instance, I can get more confidence and do more challenging activities without hesitating. Nevertheless, there are several advantages in traveling alone. I went Busan last Feburary before school began, and it was my first trip to go somewhere alone. I can freely plan my schedules and go around places where I want to go. But I recognized that I quite felt lonely because I almost had talked to my family and posted at instargram story what I was doing at that time. It seems that i'm not concentrate on the situation. It sounds like paradox because I think traveling alone is a good opportunity to focus on present. Consequently, if I were with other people, I can enjoy the journey more.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Ko Eun!
I agree. There are advantages and disadvantages of traveling alone and sometimes, we tend to forget how to live in the moment because we wish for other things.
- T. Caitlyn
I think I prefer to travel in a group. 
>> CORRECT
If I accompany with my family or friends, the journey could be a more rich experience. 
>> If I have my family and friends as company, the experience of the journey could be richer.
When we walk around some tourist attractions together, we can take pictures of one another. 
>>  While going to tourist attractions together, we can take pictures of each other.
Also, we can eat various kinds of foods and try some street foods more easily. 
>> CORRECT
For this instance, I can get more confidence and do more challenging activities without hesitating. 
>> In this instance, I can be more confident and do more challenging activities without hesitating.
Nevertheless, there are several advantages in traveling alone. 
>> CORRECT
I went Busan last Feburary before school began, and it was my first trip to go somewhere alone. 
>> I went to Busan last February before school began, and it was my first trip alone.
I can freely plan my schedules and go around places where I want to go. 
>> I can freely plan my schedule and go around places I want to go. 
But I recognized that I quite felt lonely because I almost had talked to my family and posted at instargram story what I was doing at that time.
>> But I recognized that I quite felt lonely because I just usually talked to my family and posted Instagram stories of what I was doing.
It seems that i'm not concentrate on the situation. 
>> It seems that I'm preoccupied.
It sounds like paradox because I think traveling alone is a good opportunity to focus on present. 
>> It sounds like a paradox because I think traveling alone is a good opportunity to focus on the present. 
Consequently, if I were with other people, I can enjoy the journey more.
>> CORRECT
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