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The concept of divorce impact on people¡¯s thinking. People can drop their marriage easily so couple can dispute and divorce easily. This circumstance increases the rate of the divorce. Some couples divorce even though they have children. Divorce makes children lonely and alienation from the friends. I think divorce should not be occurred.

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Hi, Robin.
I agree with your opinion. Divorce is too easy nowadays that couples, instead of fighting for their marriage, tend to give up easily.
-T. Caitlyn
The concept of divorce impact on people¡¯s thinking. 
>> The concept of divorce has an impact on people¡¯s thoughts. 
People can drop their marriage easily so couple can dispute and divorce easily. 
>> People can drop their marriage easily so couples can dispute and divorce easily. 
This circumstance increases the rate of the divorce. 
>>  CORRECT
Some couples divorce even though they have children. 
>> CORRECT
Divorce makes children lonely and alienation from the friends. 
>> Divorce makes children lonely and experience alienation from their friends. 
I think divorce should not be occurred.
>> I think divorce should not have occurred.
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