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Hey, T.Donna.
Now I am a little drunken.
I had a meeting with a pharmacist who is going to join our building.
Her husband is also pharmacist, and I met both of them today.
They are so friendly and humble.
As I told them about many things, they focused to my words.
Also, they seemed to know how to make others feel good.
We enjoyed a sumptious dinner in the luxurious japanese restaurant.
I am sure that she is going to run her drugstore very well.
Dr. MJ didn't join this meeting, so I reported them to him.
Dr.MJ also was satisfied with their polite attitude.
They even gave me a present; gift card.
Anyway, today was a good day for me.
Our previous house became having other owner.
Thus, I've got my guarrantee money from the owner.
I could pay some of my debt with that money.
And, it made me feel happier.
For me, money means freedom.
If I am free from the debt, I will be happier than now.
It's almost midnight.
I should take a shower and go to sleep now.
See you soon.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim!

Meeting the pharmacists who are also a couple is heaven sent. Two months ago when you just transferred in your new clinic, this was one of the things that you pointed out as a challenge since procuring medicine is not easy. Finally, after a couple of months, here they are. As you have described them as kind and good businessmen, I guess you are truly lucky to be in one building. I wish you both the best in you own businesses.

I hope that there will be more tenants occupying this building that will assist you in your clinic.

I strongly agree that money emancipates us from our worries of finacial constraints. After all, we all work so hard because of it. Hence, having money can set us free from the bondage of tasks. So, we have to learn not to be slaves of money by knowing how to compound and invest it wisely.

Go over my grammar suggestions. The frequency of your correct sentences is so high always. You did a great job! 

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

Hey, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Now I am a little drunken.
>> Now I am a little drunk.

I had a meeting with a pharmacist who is going to join our building.
>> Correct!

Her husband is also pharmacist, and I met both of them today.
>> Her husband is also a pharmacist, and I met both of them today.

They are so friendly and humble.
>> Correct!

As I told them about many things, they focused to my words.
>> Correct!

Also, they seemed to know how to make others feel good.
>> Correct!

We enjoyed a sumptious dinner in the luxurious japanese restaurant.
>> Corect!
Or: We enjoyed a sumptious dinner in the luxurious Japanese restaurant.

I am sure that she is going to run her drugstore very well.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ didn't join this meeting, so I reported them to him.
>> Correct!

Dr.MJ also was satisfied with their polite attitude.
>> Correct!

They even gave me a present; gift card.
>> Correct!
Or: They even gave me a present: a gift card.

Anyway, today was a good day for me.
>> Correct!

Our previous house became having other owner.
>> Our previous house has another owner.

Thus, I've got my guarrantee money from the owner.
>>Thus, I got my guarrantee money from the owner.  

I could pay some of my debt with that money.
>> Correct!

And, it made me feel happier.
>> Correct!

For me, money means freedom.
>> Correct!

If I am free from the debt, I will be happier than now.
>> If I am free from debt, I will be happier than now.

It's almost midnight.
>> Correct!

I should take a shower and go to sleep now.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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