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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
If you see a person that looks lost on the street, do you try to help them? Why or why not?

Sometimes there are many people who ask me or my friend for directions on the street.
Before I helped other people well. Recently, most people using smartphones and the map app also
came out well.
So, decrease ask me for directions on the street.
A side after the incident a few years ago, these days I don't well help for young people.
A young man asked me for directions. But, his purpose is something else.
He was promoter of strange religion. He was bind my foot for more than 20 minutes.
Luckly, my mother found me , owe I to her I got away to him.
So, I had after this incident who talk to me most of the young people ignore it.
These days they do similar things disguised as volunteers, student, etc..
They have a variety of methods. I am fed up with.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
If you see a person that looks lost on the street, do you try to help them? Why or why not?


Sometimes there are many people who ask me or my friend for directions on the street.
>> CORRECT! 
Before I helped other people well. 
>> CORRECT! 
Recently, most people using smartphones and the map app also came out well.
>> CORRECT! 
So, decrease ask me for directions on the street.
>> So, the number of people asking me for directions on the street have decreased.
A side after the incident a few years ago, these days I don't well help for young people.
>>  Aside from the incident a few years ago, these days I don't help young people well.
A young man asked me for directions. But, his purpose is something else.
>>  A young man asked me for directions, but his purpose is something else.
OR >> A young man asked me for directions, but he has something else in mind.
He was promoter of strange religion. 
>> He was promoter of a strange religion. 
He was bind my foot for more than 20 minutes.
>> He bound my foot for more than 20 minutes.
Luckly, my mother found me , owe I to her I got away to him.
>> Luckily, my mother found me, I owe it to her I got away from him.
So, I had after this incident who talk to me most of the young people ignore it.
>> So, after this I had incident, I ignore most young people who talk to me.
These days they do similar things disguised as volunteers, student, etc.
>> CORRECT! 
They have a variety of methods. 
>> CORRECT! 
I am fed up with.
>> I am fed up with it.
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