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Why are families important?

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Obviously, it's a source to overcome something when I'm sad. I guess there's only my family who can encourage me when I'm sad. And only my family who can share the happiness with each other. Also, if I have my own child, the reason I should work hard for them. So, that's why it's important.

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Failures are a part of life. Learn from them and work with motivation in the present which will help you to be successful in future. Dear Elic, believe in yourself and continue doing your best.

Obviously, it's a source to overcome something when I'm sad.
>>> Obviously, it's a source of strength to overcome something when I'm sad.

 I guess there's only my family who can encourage me when I'm sad. 
>>> I guess it's only my family who can encourage me when I'm sad.

And only my family who can share the happiness with each other. 
>>> And only my family can share the happiness with each other.

Also, if I have my own child, the reason I should work hard for them.
>>> Also, if I have my own child, I should work hard for them.

So, that's why it's important.
>>> So, that's why family is very important.
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