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What are some possible compromises that can be made between those who want child-free zones and thos

작성자: 황*하
2023-05-12 852

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It can be solved easily if owners make spaces for children in their facilities.If so, it will be the best place to visit for parents and all ages.I can understand what people complain from kids. It is quite difficult matters to solve, because it is normal situation, just think what if children act like adults, what if they don't say anything in indoor facilities and don't play there. They might create serious social problem when they grow up.Of course, they might suffer from psychological problem in their life time. Children have to play and must talk a lot while they are growing up.Child-free zone also is against the recent movement that encourage people to have babies. We are under the serious population decreasing problem.Many people have made decision not to have children or don't want to get married due to many reasons. Young people don't want to be bothered from finance matters,so the government has to provide effective measure to increase birth rate,if so people will be generous

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

It can be solved easily if owners make spaces for children in their facilities.
>> CORRECT!
If so, it will be the best place to visit for parents and all ages.
>> CORRECT!
I can understand what people complain from kids. 
>> I can understand what people complain about kids. 
It is quite difficult matters to solve, because it is normal situation, just think what if children act like adults, what if they don't say anything in indoor facilities and don't play there. 
>> It is quite difficult matters to solve, because it is a normal situation, just think what if children act like adults, what if they don't say anything in indoor facilities and don't play there. 
They might create serious social problem when they grow up.
>> They might create a serious social problem when they grow up.
Of course, they might suffer from psychological problem in their life time. 
>> CORRECT!
Children have to play and must talk a lot while they are growing up.
>> CORRECT!
Child-free zone also is against the recent movement that encourage people to have babies. 
>> CORRECT!
We are under the serious population decreasing problem.
>> CORRECT!
Many people have made decision not to have children or don't want to get married due to many reasons.
>> CORRECT!
Young people don't want to be bothered from finance matters,so the government has to provide effective measure to increase birth rate,if so people will be generous
>> Young people don't want to be bothered from financial matters, so the government has to provide effective measure to increase birth rate, if so, people will be generous to do so.
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