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I have 3 friends who are really close. I know all their family and my friends either. We can visit and sleep each others¡¯ home. Also, we don¡¯t mind to meet parents. They makes me comfortable for me like a family. I hope that we are friends eternally.

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Happy Friday, Robin!
It's nice to hear that you have friends who you treat as family already. It's also nice that even their family welcomes you as their own. Great job with your sentences, just minor corrections to take note of.
-T. Caitlyn
I have 3 friends who are really close. 
>> I have 3 friends and we are really close.
I know all their family and my friends either. 
>> We know all of each other's family members.
We can visit and sleep each others¡¯ home. 
>> We can visit and sleep in each others¡¯ homes. 
Also, we don¡¯t mind to meet parents. 
>> Also, we don¡¯t mind meeting each other's parents. 
They makes me comfortable for me like a family. 
>> They make me feel comfortable like a family. 
I hope that we are friends eternally.
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