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What I mean is that many people want to be great in many ways. That is why some want to be famous, earning a lot of money, and fame.
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Hello Jane,

Determination and perseverance move the world; thinking that others will do it for you is a sure way to fail. Determination is one of the key factors of improving your ability to speak and understand a conversation. In your case I know that you are determined to improve your skills in English.

T. Jeny  


From my perspective, it has something to do with our action.
>>From my perspective, it has something to do with our actions.
What I mean is that many people want to be great in many ways. 
>>correct
That is why some want to be famous, earning a lot of money, and fame.
>>That is why some want to be famous, earn a lot of money, and fame.
However, if they do not have responsibility about their behaviors, it would be impossible. 
>>However, if they do not have responsibility for their behaviors, it would be impossible. 
Therefore, when we are responsible for our duties and lives, we are likely to have greatness.
>>correct
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