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From my perspective, it has something to do with our action.
What I mean is that many people want to be great in many ways. That is why some want to be famous, earning a lot of money, and fame.
However, if they do not have responsibility about their behaviors, it would be impossible. Therefore, when we are responsible for our duties and lives, we are likely to have greatness.

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Hello Jane,

Determination and perseverance move the world; thinking that others will do it for you is a sure way to fail. Determination is one of the key factors of improving your ability to speak and understand a conversation. In your case I know that you are determined to improve your skills in English.

T. Jeny  


From my perspective, it has something to do with our action.
>>From my perspective, it has something to do with our actions.
What I mean is that many people want to be great in many ways. 
>>correct
That is why some want to be famous, earning a lot of money, and fame.
>>That is why some want to be famous, earn a lot of money, and fame.
However, if they do not have responsibility about their behaviors, it would be impossible. 
>>However, if they do not have responsibility for their behaviors, it would be impossible. 
Therefore, when we are responsible for our duties and lives, we are likely to have greatness.
>>correct
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