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I think that womwn should change their perception.

It'not take for granted that men only do many things for example night shoft work, military service and moving heavy things and so on.

At least women should feel thankful.

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Good day, Ms. Lily!
I guess women in your country are really enjoying their rights. However, we can't blame them, from the beginning of time, the government has already imposed a policy about the privileges of women. This may be hard for them.
Talk to you later.
Aki~

I think that women should change their perceptions.
>>> CORRECT!

It'not take for granted that men only do many things for example night shoft work, military service and moving heavy things and so on.
>>> It's not taken for granted that men only do many things for example night shift work, military service and moving heavy things,  and so on

At least women should feel thankful.
>>> CORRECT!
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