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Who are you closest to in your family? What kind of relationship do you have with that person?

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My mother is the closest person in my family. When I woke up in the morning, my mother always hugged me with saying \'I love you and bless you\'. Then I could feel comfort and her love. But I think it was not that long that I acknowledge my mother\'s love. I moved close to my school last summer because it\'s too far from my hometown. I have to wake up in the morning and prepare the breakfast by myself because l\'m living alone. Sometimes I feel lonely and it maximized when I go back to my own house after I visited my hometown for a few days. But I think it\'s good opportunity to realize the importance of family in one\'s life. If I stayed at home more long until I get older, then I will know it later and regret passing the best of times to love them. Therefore, I will try to express my sincere to my family especially to my mother.

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Hi, Lee Ko Eun!
Thank you for doing your homework. It's nice to know that you are close with your mom and that being away from her makes you appreciate her more. Also, great job with your sentences, just take note of the use of punctuation marks.
-T. Caitlyn
My mother is the closest person in my family. 
>> My mother is the closest person to me in our family
When I woke up in the morning, my mother always hugged me with saying \'I love you and bless you\'. Then I could feel comfort and her love. 
>> When I wake up in the morning, my mother always hugs me and says, 'I love you and bless you" which made me feel her comfort and love.
But I think it was not that long that I acknowledge my mother\'s love.
>> But I think it was not that long when I acknowledged my mother's love.
I moved close to my school last summer because it\'s too far from my hometown. 
>> I moved closer to my school last summer because it was too far from my hometown
I have to wake up in the morning and prepare the breakfast by myself because l\'m living alone.
 >> I have to wake up in the morning and prepare breakfast by myself because I'm living alone.
Sometimes I feel lonely and it maximized when I go back to my own house after I visited my hometown for a few days. 
>> Sometimes I feel lonely, and that feeling is intensified when I return to my own house after visiting my hometown for a few days
But I think it\'s good opportunity to realize the importance of family in one\'s life.
>> But I think it's a good opportunity to realize the importance of family in one's life
If I stayed at home more long until I get older, then I will know it later and regret passing the best of times to love them. 
>> If I'll just stay at home until I get older, I will realize it late and regret missing out on the best moments to love them.
Therefore, I will try to express my sincere to my family especially to my mother.
>> Therefore, I will try to express my sincerity to my family, especially to my mother.
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