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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the most common organizations in your country and what are they for?

The most common organizations is civil servants(public official).
civil servants are classified in detail and organization.
Normally they work for the country.
And they are run by country's taxes.
Common civil servants are school teacher, career soldier, and local officials.
The highest and best ranking is president. President is also include in the civil service.
Recently, competition for low ranking civil service exam is very fierce.
But, I am not interested civil servants yet.
Anyway, I appreciate their service.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the most common organizations in your country and what are they for?


The most common organizations is civil servants(public official).
>> The most common organization is the organization of civil servants (public officials).
civil servants are classified in detail and organization.
>> Civil servants are classified in detail and organization.
Normally they work for the country.
>> CORRECT! 
And they are run by country's taxes.
>> CORRECT! 
Common civil servants are school teacher, career soldier, and local officials.
>> Common civil servants are school teachers, career soldiers, and local officials.
The highest and best ranking is president. 
>> The highest and best ranking is the president. 
President is also include in the civil service.
>> The president is also included in the civil service.
Recently, competition for low ranking civil service exam is very fierce.
>> CORRECT! 
But, I am not interested civil servants yet.
>> But, I am not interested in being a civil servant yet.
Anyway, I appreciate their service.
>> CORRECT! 

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